Unit 1 Final Essay and Reflection

What is the relationship between the individual and the community? Why does this relationship matter?

The relationship between the individual and the community is when the community reaches out in a positive manner. The community provides the individual with safety, programs, activities, entertainment, resources, etc. It should provide positive things to grow as one. However, in reality communities do not always provide this type of relationship. In most cases the relationship between the individual and the community is either a positive or negative relationship. There are two types of relationships because it depends on the nature of a specific community. It is known that communities are formed by the people that reside in it, the atmosphere and nature of it, because they contribute all of these things. However, each community differs from one another based up the terms mentioned above. There are communities that are established in wealthy areas, which are mainly the fine and productive communities that contribute positivity. Then there are the developing communities, which are the opposite of the wealthy area communities. It is common that communities established in particular areas such as, wealthy, middle-class, and lower-class will contribute their aspects, which is what builds either a positive or negative community. 

With that said, the relationship between the individual and the community is important because it will determine the person we will blossom into, which can be a positive or negative one. Ultimately, it is based  upon the community to create a healthy relationship with the individual to mold him/her into a well rounded person. 

Unit 1: Revision Plan

Did your peers guess your thesis correctly? Yes

Did you peers believe your thesis is an arguable one?  Yes

What, if any, revisions do you think you need to make to your thesis based upon the annotations and comments your peers made?

-I feel I don't need to make any revisions to my thesis because I mention my claims and they are all arguable. 

Choose TWO comments from your peers that you believe are the most helpful to you. Then explain how you will use these comments to help you revise your essay.  Indicate the name of the person who made that comment in parenthesis. 

Comment 1: Natalie Orozco

Your response: Natalie shared a couple ideas that I should use to elaborate further on one of my claims. I will most certainly take it into consideration.  

Comment 2: Zeenat Alli

Your response: Zeenat suggested to elaborate further in my intro for the "they say" part. I will take that into consideration. 

Are there any other important ideas you have about how you can improve your essay?

- Not for now. 

Unit 1: Building Community/Facing Violence- Thesis Revision and Body Paragraphs

In order to address the problem of violence in the community, we need leaders, parents and authority figures to possess of the correct values, to initiate the help that the young people need to create a new life for themselves. Communities need to change the way we approach and judge our young people. We need to establish vital  relationships between adults and young people to be able to get through to them. In addition, we must provide community centers that allow the youth to express themselves, discover their creative abilities, and practice spiritual development so they can attain control over their lives.

Body ParagraphTopic: Spiritual Development

Today's society does not provide the youth with [trusting metaphors] nor spiritual development guidance that can help them develop initiation. Instead, society creates mythic images and representations for youth to look up, which can effect them negatively. Likewise, in most cases youth turn to gangs, violence, etc., because they lack of a mentor or role model to guide them. Having such can help the youth in transforming and discovering themselves. 

Free Write

After reading the book Hearts and Hands by Luis Rodriguez I have noticed that Rodriguez has several claims about the causes of violence and his possible solutions to help cease violence, help the troubled youth progress as individuals. With that said, this has impacted me greatly because I now know how the system work, which I believe it does not do put in all the effort in ending this issue nor fully helping the youth.