Wednesday, May 2, 2012
Free Write
After reading the book Hearts and Hands by Luis Rodriguez I have noticed that Rodriguez has several claims about the causes of violence and his possible solutions to help cease violence, help the troubled youth progress as individuals. With that said, this has impacted me greatly because I now know how the system work, which I believe it does not do put in all the effort in ending this issue nor fully helping the youth.
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"I now know how the system works, which I believe it does not put all the effort in ending this issue nor fully helping the youth." This is the only part of your. statement that resembles a thesis. Revise your thesis to make an argument. What part of "the system" do you better understand? And in what ways do you believe "it" is not doing its job? Who or what is not doing it's job? Why? How is "it" not helping the youth? Your language is too vague and non-specific to the ideas of the book
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